How to Write An InMail They Can’t Refuse

Nov 10, 2014

Closeup of businessman typing on laptop computerCandidate engagement. It’s a topic on the lips and hearts of recruiters and talent acquisition professionals worldwide.

With LinkedIn’s unending commitment to implementing changes, and with more and more potential candidates becoming fed-up with obtuse and clueless recruiters, it has become clearer than ever that mastering the art of candidate touch is imperative for people who desire success in this industry. You don’t want to get burned by LinkedIn for getting negative feedback on InMails and you certainly don’t want to repel potential candidates by reaching out to them in ways they don’t appreciate. 

For situations when a recruiter or sourcer begins candidate contact with an InMail or an email, the subject line and body of the message should be crafted with care. With this in mind, I’d like to share some methods that have worked for me. The InMails and emails that follow are recent outreach success stories I’ve had. For the sake of transparency (for our numbers driven readers) I’ll add that I recently went a while without having a LinkedIn Recruiter account. I reactivated it in August of this year and so far I’ve sent 649 InMails, 638 of which have positive responses. Here’s a screenshot of my feedback score:


Let’s begin…

Justin Giovinco’s LinkedIn profile recently came to my attention.


As a Talent Acquisition Manager for PepsiCo, I felt he might be someone worth knowing.  A review of his work history revealed that his career path included companies like HJ Heinz, Nestle, and Kaiser Permanente. I decided to reach out and scanned his profile for clues as to how I could best initiate conversation. At the bottom of the page, under Education, I found a key to starting the engine of communication. Justin was Co-Captain of the Varsity Wrestling Team in college.


This information was used in my InMail subject line.


When Justin opened my message, the first lines he saw were: “I’m only half serious. You can ignore that question, since my primary purpose was to get you to read my InMail instead of deleting it along with the dozens of others we all choose to ignore.”

Justin’s response was positive. He and I scheduled a call and had a great conversation.

Another success story is my interaction with Jill Riopelle from Airbnb. She’s been with the company quite a while and is currently their Head of Recruiting.


I reviewed her profile and looked for interesting conversation starters. She speaks Italian and French, she studied International Affairs, she’s received a handful of recommendations, but none of these struck me as something I wanted to use as an icebreaker. Then one of her previous employers gave me an “ah-ha” moment. I have no idea what the company Backroads does, but the name triggered memories of my recent backpacking trip in Asia, and since Jill works for Airbnb, a company strongly linked to travel, I decided to go with a backpacking type subject line. I hunted down her email address and sent over a message.


In the body of the message I mentioned that my buddies and I used Airbnb while we were in Thailand. The first line of her reply was “Great subject line – I can clearly see your recruiting roots.”

My last example is my communication with VP Talent Acquisition at Motorola Mobility, Neil Davies.


 His LinkedIn profile details an interesting and progressive career path.


I decided to use his unique employers in my subject line. Keep in mind: subject lines don’t need to completely make sense or be based entirely in reality. Your goal is to get the recipient to open your message.  I sent this:


The first line he saw when he opened the note was: “My apologies for the cheesy opener, but I wanted to get your attention.”

His response?

“Great subject line that did catch my attention. I’d be happy to connect. I’m around next week, give me a call.”

It cannot be stressed enough how valuable customized messaging is to establishing relationships and building rapport. Experiment. Try new things. Realize that you cannot and will not win every single person every single time, but also realize that when you look and sound like every other recruiter out there, a person’s urge to interact with you will be small, if there is any urge at all. Happy hunting.

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